Home At writing we learnt about how to write a recount.These are the things that make a recount good: -First person (I, my, me, i'm...) -Many verbs have and ed on the end to make it to the past tense -Cronological order-the order of when it happened Words you should use in recounts: -firstly -next -then -the -after that -meanwhile -eventually -later -finally Introduction Answer who,what,when,where and why. After we had done all that we played a writing game. That game was really fun.
HORROR MANSION STORY 1 As soon as I arrived at our new mansion it just felt like something was in there. I went to my room and had a little read. There were a few mysterious creaks from the attic. I bravely went up there, I slowly very slowly walked across the attic. Something a few metres away from me was glowing dimly, as quick as a flash it took off under my feet! Everything went black. When I woke up I was lying in impossible heat. I looked up around me and saw millions of these dim blue lights. They all started carrying me into some very dark cave. Around me I saw all sorts of foreign aliens that were from many different planets. I got dumped in with some sort of vampire with no teeth or arms but I wasn't afraid. I got indeed quite friendly with him teaching him hand shakes, even a bit of English. I got so tired of being in this ghastly place so I decided to creep out somehow. This was my plan: I saw this ventilation system in the roof and found where it would take me. So I strained myself up the bars of the jail and climbed through the ventilation. I then felt a tap on my foot and then pain in my chest it was excruciating. I lost consciousness and when I woke up I was lying in my attic back where it all started. I ran as fast as I could home to my old house and surprisingly my mum and dad were there. I made a complicated excuse for my bleeding chest rather than telling them what really had happened. At least they believed my excuse.THE STORY DOES NOT END NOW!
Horror Manion Story 2 I went to bed that very night. I just couldn't get to sleep.Then the fire alarm rang, I raced out of the house. I was still running when I fell down a hole. Terrified I was falling in total darkness I hit some dim blue water, I thought to myself, not again. On the top of the cave the blue things raced to me and started to bring me under water. Suprisingly I could breath. Finally I reached a cage which they roughly placed me in. It took a little while to get my breath back. Then I could'nt, I saw horrifying sculls and ribcages around me. I tried as hard as I could to get out but I just couldn't. I saw a key in my reach. I easily grabbed it. I got out, but what now. I dug at the sand and saw some light. The gravity suddenly changed. I was in the new mansion. I tugged as hard as I could to open the mansions front door but it was to tightly locked. I decided to take some rest. So I did. I woke up terrified from a dream, LOUD BANGING FROM THE ROOF!!! Why would they want me what do they want me for.
HORROR MANSION THE FINALE Bravely I ran as hard and as I could to the door. I smashed It open and ran for my life to the door. I smashed it open and ran wickedly down the road. Suddenly those stupid hideous blue dim lights were being shot at me by aliens. I know it sounds very weird but it's happening alright. I got hit. When I woke up I was in a dark hole just staring at cement. There seemed to be a button in the wall. I pressed it, and a big block of cement was slowly coming down on me. AHHHHHHHHHHGGG!!! I panicked. But then I thought that keeping calm is the best solution. There seemed to be a loose brick in the wall. I pushed it and a big entrance seemed to come out. I just jumped in that in time before it crushed me. The tunnel led me to the place were I had first seen this planet. I took a nap on the ground. When I woke up, guess what? I was at home. I was delighted.
Epulouge
Years have passed and no signs of blue dim lights. So I can now end my story's.
The Computer Traveler
It was 1957 when Allen Mclain got his first computer. All day he would play games and learn new things. He still had his computer untill 2000 and was getting very slow. One day his computer sparked up and went black. Allen tried to turn it on but it wasn't doing anything. The next day allen went to the Apple store.
He bought a new thin air mac book pro. Allen liked his new computer so much. Wikispaces had just come out and Allen made an acount. His wiki was fantastic, it was the best in the world. He had 1,000,000 coments,and on his clustr map he had 2,000,000 views from every single country in the world. He had so many views that one day, 50,000 people started a riot outside of his house. He wished that he had never made a wikispace. The computer sucked Allen into the wikispace and it was in EDIT MODE!!! Allen ran around making disturbing footprints on all his beutiful work. It randomly just has been saved and you could hear his pearcing scream all around the world. That made all the 50,000 people go away. ''I have now got to get out of here'' said Allen. The computer suddenly sparked up and went black Allen suddenly appeared in real life.
i write story
Jarred's holiday to Disney Land
One day there was a boy called Jarred and he was very daring. He had very nice parents. His dad just like him, very daring and his mum, the exact opposite, very fussy. Jarred woke up to another one of his ordinary days, but this day was not ordinary. His mum and dad were packing up with suitcases. "Where are we going" says Jarred. "To Dinsney Land in California" Jarred had been eager to go there for a very long time. A couple of hours later they were flying to California. The view was spectacular was spectacular from the seat that they were in. The plane roughly landed on the runway. Giant ques were piling off the plane. After about 7 minuets of waiting they finally got off. Jarred and the rest of his family got a taxi to disney land, the driver rapidly raced through the town. When they got there they stared at the theme park in amazement for ages. Jarred first wanted to go on this ride called ride. It looked very scary, Jarred said "I want to go on that exhilirating ride" Jarred's mum obviously said no."So aggrevating" But his da said "ca mon lets go" The ride bellowed and rushed through the air. At the end of the ride Jarred proudly leaped off the ride. The next ride was a dragon ride. He went on that by himself. After the ride Jarred answered "Blunt and slogish" Well the the last ride was a superman ride. It looked brilliant. Jarreds mum hesitated. But him and his dad still went on it. It was coming to about 6:30 and Jarred had now witnessed the amusment of Disney Land.
Iwrite
Magic T-Shirt I was at farmers looking around for a T-Shirt.One of the T-Shirts caught my eye,the T-Shirt was on sale for $5. Straight when I got home I tried it on. I loomed into a mysty place, I felt fossilised. Suddenly the ground started to rumble. Boiling, Molton,Lava gushes out of a nearby mountain. I ran for all I was worth. But I felt as if I was in the air, I was! I was gliding like all the other terradactulls around me. Hang on terradactulls? Ahhhhhhhhhhhhh! Even though they didn't notice of me I was still petrofide. I made a good landing, I thought I was with the dinosaurs. Again the ground starts rumbling. But this time it's a T-Rex. I ran like a cheeta across the sand and in the bush. All of a sudden I was lyng in my very own bed. I looked to see if I still have my T-Shirt on, why yes I did?
Speed boat disaster/ Whitewater Wackos
One sunny morning at Rockwell raceway there were two fearsome racers Ash from NZ and Oliver from USA. Oliver was standing by his boat looking impressed. "Are you ready to get poned Ash" said Oliver. Ash just sensibly ignored him and strode to his boat on the other side of the racetrack. The presenter announced "Welcome to Rockwell Raceway, today we have a stupendous show for you today". The two racers hopped in the boats and Oliver hastily said look at my 350 horsepower motor. "Ok" the presenter said "Ready..." They started their motors "Steady..." They warmed up their motors "GO!!!"
They zooooomed off with smoke crowding the area. They were coming up to the deadly corner what will they do!? They go round the corner as light as a feather! But all there troubles are not over yet they are coming up to spiny Zig zag. They go through the Land of the dead past the freaky skulls! Then comes SunnySide the last little streack! With Oliver in the lead!
Suddenly a plastic bag gets caught on Olivers rudder what will he do! Olivers boat came to a complete hault. Olivers boat was now flooding with water and was now sinking. Oliver could not swim so Ash decided to help him since he could swim. Ash bravely jumped out of his boat and made his way to Olivers boat. Olivers shoulders were now in the water and he was panicing. Ash grabbed him by the arm. Ash heaved him up to the surface so he could breathe properly. Ash started swimming holding Oliver by the arm. They reached the shore and Ash said to Oliver "Are you alright" Oliver replied softly "Yeah" The presenter announced "now for our medal ceremony, even though none of them finished the race they still will get awards."
They proudly stepped up onto the podium all soaking wet. The Judge said to Ash "Well done Ash here is the bravery medal you sure deserve it for your extreme courage" the Judge said. "Oliver since you participated you get awarded the participation award since you took part in this amazing event." Oliver looked like he was going to start boasting about it. Ash felt inside very good about himself. Ash then asked the judge if he could say a few words. The judge said "sure thing Ash" the Judge got the crowds attention and said that Ash had a few words to say. The crowd went silent. Ash said "Hmm Mmm, this disaster could of ended badly, and we need to make a STOP to this littering nonsense. My friend Oliver almost drowned in this race because a plastic bag got caught in his rudder. I hope you all have learnt a lesson here." The crowd cheered.
The Judge said to Ash "thank you Ash for saying that speech, I hope it makes a difference.
2 WEEKS LATER
Rockwell Raceways grass is green and the water is sparkling blue
Home
At writing we learnt about how to write a recount.These are the things that make a recount good:
-First person (I, my, me, i'm...)
-Many verbs have and ed on the end to make it to the past tense
-Cronological order-the order of when it happened
Words you should use in recounts:
-firstly
-next
-then
-the
-after that
-meanwhile
-eventually
-later
-finally
Introduction
Answer who,what,when,where and why.
After we had done all that we played a writing game. That game was really fun.
HORROR MANSION STORY 1
As soon as I arrived at our new mansion it just felt like something was in there. I went to my room and had a little read. There were a few mysterious creaks from the attic. I bravely went up there, I slowly very slowly walked across the attic. Something a few metres away from me was glowing dimly, as quick as a flash it took off under my feet! Everything went black. When I woke up I was lying in impossible heat. I looked up around me and saw millions of these dim blue lights. They all started carrying me into some very dark cave. Around me I saw all sorts of foreign aliens that were from many different planets.
I got dumped in with some sort of vampire with no teeth or arms but I wasn't afraid. I got indeed quite friendly with him teaching him hand shakes, even a bit of English. I got so tired of being in this ghastly place so I decided to creep out somehow. This was my plan: I saw this ventilation system in the roof and found where it would take me. So I strained myself up the bars of the jail and climbed through the ventilation. I then felt a tap on my foot and then pain in my chest it was excruciating. I lost consciousness and when I woke up I was lying in my attic back where it all started. I ran as fast as I could home to my old house and surprisingly my mum and dad were there. I made a complicated excuse for my bleeding chest rather than telling them what really had happened. At least they believed my excuse. THE STORY DOES NOT END NOW!
Horror Manion Story 2
I went to bed that very night. I just couldn't get to sleep.Then the fire alarm rang, I raced out of the house. I was still running when I fell down a hole. Terrified I was falling in total darkness I hit some dim blue water, I thought to myself, not again. On the top of the cave the blue things raced to me and started to bring me under water. Suprisingly I could breath. Finally I reached a
cage which they roughly placed me in. It took a little while to get my breath back. Then I could'nt, I saw horrifying sculls and ribcages around me. I tried as hard as I could to get out but I just couldn't. I saw a key in my reach. I easily grabbed it. I got out, but what now. I dug at the sand and saw some light. The gravity suddenly changed. I was in the new mansion. I tugged as hard as I could to open the mansions front door but it was to tightly locked.
I decided to take some rest. So I did. I woke up terrified from a dream, LOUD BANGING FROM THE ROOF!!! Why would they want me what do they want me for.
HORROR MANSION THE FINALE
Bravely I ran as hard and as I could to the door. I smashed It open and ran for my life to the door. I smashed it open
and ran wickedly down the road. Suddenly those stupid hideous blue dim lights were being shot at me by aliens.
I know it sounds very weird but it's happening alright. I got hit. When I woke up I was in a dark hole just staring at cement. There seemed to be a button in the wall. I pressed it, and a big block of cement was slowly coming down on me. AHHHHHHHHHHGGG!!! I panicked. But then I thought that keeping calm is the best solution.
There seemed to be a loose brick in the wall. I pushed it and a big entrance seemed to come out. I just jumped in that in time before it crushed me. The tunnel led me to the place were I had first seen this planet.
I took a nap on the ground. When I woke up, guess what? I was at home. I was delighted.
Epulouge
Years have passed and no signs of blue dim lights. So I can now end my story's.
The Computer Traveler
It was 1957 when Allen Mclain got his first computer. All day he would play games and learn new things. He still had his computer untill 2000 and was getting very slow. One day his computer sparked up and went black. Allen tried to turn it on but it wasn't doing anything. The next day allen went to the Apple store.He bought a new thin air mac book pro. Allen liked his new computer so much. Wikispaces had just come out and Allen made an acount. His wiki was fantastic, it was the best in the world. He had 1,000,000 coments,and on his clustr map he had 2,000,000 views from every single country in the world. He had so many views that one day, 50,000 people started a riot outside of his house. He wished that he had never made a wikispace. The computer sucked Allen into the wikispace and it was in EDIT MODE!!! Allen ran around making disturbing footprints on all his beutiful work. It randomly just has been saved and you could hear his pearcing scream all around the world. That made all the 50,000 people go away. ''I have now got to get out of here'' said Allen. The computer suddenly sparked up and went black Allen suddenly appeared in real life.
i write story
Jarred's holiday to Disney Land
One day there was a boy called Jarred and he was very daring. He had very nice parents. His dad just like him, very daring and his mum, the exact opposite, very fussy. Jarred woke up to another one of his ordinary days, but this day was not ordinary. His mum and dad were packing up with suitcases. "Where are we going" says Jarred. "To Dinsney Land in California" Jarred had been eagerto go there for a very long time. A couple of hours later they were flying to California. The view was spectacular was spectacular from the seat that they were in. The plane roughly landed on the runway. Giant ques were piling off the plane. After about 7 minuets of waiting they finally got off. Jarred and the rest of his family got a taxi to disney land, the driver rapidly raced through the town.
When they got there they stared at the theme park in amazement for ages. Jarred first wanted to go on this ride called ride.
It looked very scary, Jarred said "I want to go on that exhilirating ride" Jarred's mum obviously said no."So aggrevating" But his da said "ca mon lets go" The ride bellowed and rushed through the air. At the end of the ride Jarred proudly leaped off the ride. The next ride was a dragon ride. He went on that by himself.
After the ride Jarred answered "Blunt and slogish" Well the the last ride was a superman ride. It looked brilliant. Jarreds mum hesitated. But him and his dad still went on it. It was coming to about 6:30 and Jarred had now witnessed the amusment of Disney Land.
Iwrite
Magic T-ShirtI was at farmers looking around for a T-Shirt.One of the T-Shirts caught my eye,the T-Shirt was on sale for $5. Straight when I got home I tried it on. I loomed into a mysty place, I felt fossilised. Suddenly the ground started to rumble. Boiling, Molton,Lava gushes out of a nearby mountain. I ran for all I was worth.
But I felt as if I was in the air, I was! I was gliding like all the other terradactulls around me. Hang on terradactulls? Ahhhhhhhhhhhhh! Even though they didn't notice of me I was still petrofide. I made a good landing, I thought I was with the dinosaurs. Again the ground starts rumbling. But this time it's a T-Rex.
I ran like a cheeta across the sand and in the bush. All of a sudden I was lyng in my very own bed. I looked to see if I still have my T-Shirt on, why yes I did?
Speed boat disaster/ Whitewater Wackos
One sunny morning at Rockwell raceway there were two fearsome racers Ash from NZ and Oliver from USA. Oliver was standing by his boat looking impressed. "Are you ready to get poned Ash" said Oliver. Ash just sensibly ignored him and strode to his boat on the other side of the racetrack. The presenter announced "Welcome to Rockwell Raceway, today we have a stupendous show for you today". The two racers hopped in the boats and Oliver hastily said look at my 350 horsepower motor. "Ok" the presenter said "Ready..." They started their motors "Steady..." They warmed up their motors "GO!!!"
They zooooomed off with smoke crowding the area. They were coming up to the deadly corner what will they do!? They go round the corner as light as a feather! But all there troubles are not over yet they are coming up to spiny Zig zag. They go through the Land of the dead past the freaky skulls! Then comes SunnySide the last little streack! With Oliver in the lead!
Suddenly a plastic bag gets caught on Olivers rudder what will he do! Olivers boat came to a complete hault. Olivers boat was now flooding with water and was now sinking. Oliver could not swim so Ash decided to help him since he could swim. Ash bravely jumped out of his boat and made his way to Olivers boat. Olivers shoulders were now in the water and he was panicing. Ash grabbed him by the arm. Ash heaved him up to the surface so he could breathe properly. Ash started swimming holding Oliver by the arm. They reached the shore and Ash said to Oliver "Are you alright" Oliver replied softly "Yeah" The presenter announced "now for our medal ceremony, even though none of them finished the race they still will get awards."
They proudly stepped up onto the podium all soaking wet. The Judge said to Ash "Well done Ash here is the bravery medal you sure deserve it for your extreme courage" the Judge said. "Oliver since you participated you get awarded the participation award since you took part in this amazing event." Oliver looked like he was going to start boasting about it. Ash felt inside very good about himself. Ash then asked the judge if he could say a few words. The judge said "sure thing Ash" the Judge got the crowds attention and said that Ash had a few words to say. The crowd went silent. Ash said "Hmm Mmm, this disaster could of ended badly, and we need to make a STOP to this littering nonsense. My friend Oliver almost drowned in this race because a plastic bag got caught in his rudder. I hope you all have learnt a lesson here." The crowd cheered.
The Judge said to Ash "thank you Ash for saying that speech, I hope it makes a difference.2 WEEKS LATER
Rockwell Raceways grass is green and the water is sparkling blue